Bcdd Scholarship Essay

Using a previous scholarship essay contest we hosted, where our judges received more than 4,000 essays, we noticed some frequent mistakes students make that can instantly disqualify you from an essay contest.

We thought to ourselves, "Hello, learning opportunity!

Here, an example of what NOT to do in an essay – and some tips on making yourself a better candidate for scholarship cash.

Here’s one of the essays we received for a previous scholarship contest, to help you learn the do’s and don’ts of essay writing:

“To be able to hold onto your money you have to know how to manage it. Money management is a complicated process. As teenagers we often have no idea how to manage money and we end up wasting a lot of it. But in a bad economy most of us have had a crash course in what happens when you don’t manage your money properly. We have had to delve into a world foreign and unfamiliar to us and solve our own money problems. The most successful of us have managed to still have some semblance of a social life without going over our small budgets. The keys to doing this successfully are actually quite simple.

Set up your own budget of expenses. Teenagers may not have to worry about paying a mortgage or rent but we do have to be able to pay for gas, insurance for our vehicles, and the never ending list of project expenses and supplies for classes. So you have to sit down and balance what you spend in a month with what you actually make, and whether that’s the money you get for your birthday that you manage to stretch with help from mom’s pocketbook or it’s the minimum wage that you get from the local fast food joint where you have managed to find employment the money comes from somewhere and it needs to be written down.

Review your expenses daily. This includes balancing your checkbook and reviewing your online statements, as well as calculating any emergency expenses that you were not considering. This needs to be fluid as sometimes things come up that you just couldn’t have forseen.

You have to get creative. You are not always going to have the time to sit there with a calculator crunching numbers so create small ways to keep thing balanced without having to. Send yourself easy phone reminders about a few of your expenses. Always bring your school id with you because a lot of places will give students discounted rates. And finally, just remember where your money is going it will help.”

So, what was wrong and what was right?

One thing the essay writer did correctly was to stay within the word count for the contest.

The essay contest stated within the rules that essays should range from 250-350 words and this essay comes in at 349 words. Good job!

Another positive is that the writer stayed on topic and answered the question that was presented.

However, even though the writer did stay on topic, the response took a meandering approach and didn’t take a strong or memorable stance. In short, the “meat” of the essay wasn’t there. Think of it this way: sum up in one sentence what you want the reviewer to know and remember after reading your essay. Did you get that across in a clear and concise way?

Each essay should get across at least one breakout idea (aka, the thesis statement) and the rest of the essay should focus on selling that point. If it’s a new, creative or off-beat idea, focus on selling and explaining that. If it’s a common idea, focus on trying to say it better than anyone else.

Here are a few more examples of what the essay writer did wrong:

Misspellings –

Misspellings are the fastest way to ensure an essay is disqualified. When combing through a stack of essays, a judge will first rule out the essays with simple misspellings. Long story short: run a spell check and have someone else you trust look over it. It’s always best to get a second set of eyes.

Incomplete sentences – Remember, each sentence should have a subject (someone or something) and a verb (action). Wondering if your sentence is complete? Here’s a hint: A complete sentence tells a complete thought.

No capitalization –

it’s bad enough not to capitalize words at the beginning of a sentence, but at the beginning of a paragraph it stands out even more! Yikes!

Missing punctuation –

In this example, the writer does not have proper command over the use of commas — namely they are missing in places they should have been added and added places they are not required.

Poor grammar and sentences that don’t make sense –

The essay writer uses poor word choices, improper grammar and mistakes such as having too many spaces between words. Another example of poor grammar is the confusion of grammatical persons — in the beginning of the essay the writer uses the first person plural (we) and toward the end, the writer uses the second person (you).

Run-on sentences –

In this essay, one sentence has 72 words. As a rule, try to keep sentences no longer than 35 words each.

Keep these tips in mind the next time you write an essay. Remember, you don’t want to give the judges any reason to disqualify your essay right off the bat.

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Organization : Kerala Backward Communities Development Department
Scholarship Name : OBC Prematric Scholarship 2017-18
Applicable For : OBC Students of std I to X
Applicable State: Kerala
Application Deadline : 24.11.17
Website : http://www.bcdd.kerala.gov.in/
Notification :  https://www.scholarships.net.in/uploads/18744-Final.pdf
Apply Online : http://www.scholarship.itschool.gov.in/

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You can now ask your questions about this scholarship.Please go to the bottom of this page.

OBC Prematric Scholarship :

This scheme introduced by Govt. of India during 1998-99. In Kerala, it started only during 2011-12, after the formation of this Department. The OBC students of std I to X , studying in Govt/Aided institutions are the target group.

Related : BCDD Kerala OEC Grant Claim Entry 2016-17 : www.scholarships.net.in/11114.html

The annual family income should not exceed Rs. 44,500/- and the percentage of mark/grade scored in previous annual examination must be eqaul or greater than 50%.

The applications should be submitted to the head of the institution and the data should be entered by school authorities through online. School authorities can login through www.scholarship.itschool.gov.in. The scheme has two components ie adhoc grant and monthly stipend.

Rates are given below :

List of OBC Communities which are eligible for Educational Concessions as is given to OEC:
1. Vaniya (Vanika, Vanika Vaisya, Vanibha Chetty, Vaniya Chetty, Ayiravar, Nagarathar and Vaniyan
2. Veluthedathu Nair (Veluthedan and Vannathan)
3. Chetty/Chetties (Kottar Chetties, Parakka Chetties, Elur Chetties, Attingal Chetties, Pudukkada Chetties, Iraniel Chetties, Sri Pandara Chetties, Telugu Chetties, Udiyankulangara Chetties, Peroorkada Chetties, Sadhu Chetties, 24 Mana Chetties, Wayanadan Chetties, Kalavara Chetties and 24 Mana Telugu Chetties,
4. Ezhavathi (Vathy)
5. Ganika
6. Kanisu or Kaniyar Panicker, Kani or Kaniyan (Ganaka) or Kanisan or Kamnan, Kalari Kurup / Kalari Panicker
7. Vilkurup, Perumkollan
8. Yadavas (Kolaya, Ayar, Mayar, Maniyani and Iruman), Erumakkar
9. Devanga
10. Pattariyas
11. Saliyas (Chaliya, Chaliyan)
12. Pandithar
13. Vaniar
14. Ezhuthachan
15. Chakkala / Chakkala Nair
16. Reddiars (throughout the State except in Malabar Area)
17. Kavuthiya
18. Veerasaiva (Yogi, Yogeeswara Poopandaram, Malapandaram, Jangam, Matapathi, Pandaram, Pandaran, Vairavi, Vairagi)
19. Vilakkithala Nair – Vilakkithalavan
20. Vaduka – Vadukan, Vadugar, Vaduka, Vaduvan
21. Chavalakkaran
22. Agasa
23. Kaikolan
24. Kannadiyans
25. Kerala Mudalis
26. Madivala
27. Naikkans
28. Tholkolans
29. Thottian
30. Mooppar or Kallan Moopan or Kallan Moopar

About BCDD Kerala :
A long lasting dream of the Backward Communities of Kerala comes true when the Government of Kerala created a separate department for them to deal the issues related to the social and educational progression of backward communities in Kerala, in the form of planning and implementing welfare schemes.

Though the substantial force of OBC community covers over 65% of the total state population, the mass of the community still remains as one of the disadvantaged and marginalized sections of the society.

Director, BC Development Department,
Ayyankali Bhavan,

Phone: 0471-2727379
Email: obcdirectorate@gmail.com


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